With blue braids tipped foam-green
and skin the shine of the sea
she glides between the caps and waves.
in a moment of sponteanity
she leaps and flaps her sparkle-scaled
fish tail, where two legs should be.
fooled many a sailor and captain of neptune
with a shimmer or wink of an eye.
and if you follow the wailing-whale
in the deep, her coral castle will appear
a mansion of twisted, fanciful colors where only
she, the Sea-Nymph dwells.
let her beauty not fool you or the corner of her kiss
for I know from fated experience she's still a fish.
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reading too much classic poetry and this is what comes out... blargg... CL
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Thank you Dream!
CL
Beautiful imagery and language use...last line was awesome. That's really all I have to say.
I caught a typo in the 1st line of the 2 stanza, it should be spontaneity, but I agree with Brian it was easy to read and the ending made me laugh.
nice work.
-El-
thank you Brian!
CL
I like this one
You misspelt Captain, but it's flawless in every other sense. The poem rolls right off the tongue, and the descriptions are vivid and easy to manifest. And the way you end it is perfect.